this was very well written i enjoyed reading it keep up the great work.
~Freak~

I would love to be part of that dream. To bad it can't be real! Very well written! 5/5 Take Care! Brooke~

Good poem...

I really like the first stanza, it has a perfect flow and rhymes very well...

It seems as this world of yours have both good and bad sides..being alone isn't always too good is it?=)

Good poem...You express your feelings about this world in a good way

Not sure how I feel about this poem, Its different tho. :~)

This was a good poem and love the twist in the ending it was a good one great read keep up the good work...

That was very good!!! It flowed very nicely. xxx

The poem flowed nicely to the end and I agree that nothing is as it seems I like it. 5

good job. I love poems that rhyme, shows you put real effort into it

this has a really good flow to it, very soulful.
Well done
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wow that was really good! The rhyming was great and it flowed wonderful.

The rhyme was good, one line seemed force. The one about being on my own. I like th eway you weren't too specefic. You left it open that way the reader could put more of their meaning to it.

This was wonderful. Great description and great rhyme. Only thing I suggest is putting a few commas in where it is necessary in order to make it easier to read for the reader. But the poem and message is awesome. great job.

Take Care,
Renee

This doesn't seem so dark. I find serenity in my dream..My place where no one else can ever go....I wouldn't call that dark.

I love the way this flowed...it rhymed great and I never lost interest. Very nice write! :)

gr8 work.. true emotion.. gr8 flow.. wonderful rhyme..
keep up the gud work..
take care
nouna

Cool world! 5

I liked the other poem you wrote more (can't remember the name but I commented it), but that doesn't mean this one was bad, quite the oposit, very well written, can't put a finger on what it was I didn't like though. But just to make sure you get it, VERY good poem;p

Best Wishes,
Patrik

Your rhyming was amazing i likes it alot
"To hear my tears or my sorrowful pain
No one to watch me go insane
To leave the world and to be alone
To leave the rush and be on my own"

love them lines so much you very good ant writing keep it up

The words in this poem wer very mind-capturing and made u want to read it till the end.. i think its a unique idea to have a black world in ur dreams, rather than a world that is gud and all the love, etc.. to escape the darkness of the real world... my thumbs up 4 originality.. gr8 job, well done!! amazing rhyme, too..
take care
Nannoush

This poem was great I loved the flow of it. The stanza was my favorite I know how it feels. I gave your poem a 5 keep up the good work.

To hear my tears or my sorrowful pain
No one to watch me go insane

I love those lines. ^_^ You're the awesome!

-Carissa-