it was a sad emotional poem and i enjoyed it....
maybe put part 1 as 1 poem and part 2 as a diff poem and then revise and work on stanzas and rhyming...all in all it was a good poem... i voted 5 on this
I love it! A tradgic love story! Great! I'm a writer and I right novels poems, and songs and so I can relate with what's going on. I've been known to have characters who've done things like this. It's complex like myself and you did a great job
i would tell you i love it, but love is over used. remember suiside is a lasting solution to a temperary problem. your ryhme was placed well in the poem. however i dont think that if i was sitting on my dead boyfriends grave i would be wishing my tears were blood. i would just want to die, and lay next to him. just so you know... but it works.
I normally don't care for love poems to much because they are always about all the good and happy things of it, but this poem shows both sides, very sad yet it is amazing and magnificent, beauitful job
This is a great poem. Part one being my favorite.
'i saw you lip the word love
my heaven became home
with hell up above'
those lines are my favorite. To me they have a lot of meaning behind them.
Overall great write. Keep up the good work.