Comments : Love Letter

  • 18 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    Nada, I agree. Im sorry but this doesnt have much emotion and it is repeated. Please use this as help and not as an insult...
    Love always,
    Haily
    xoxooxoxox

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    i agree with nada, maybe some rhyming and like i said before the length of lines and maybe stanzas for the flow...stanzas arnt that important but could help :)
    hope i helped?

  • 18 years ago

    by Nici

    Not much more to add to the other comments you have recieved on this poem. Some lines are again to long whilst others seem to short, which affects the flow and overall effect.

    Keep Writing
    Nici

  • 18 years ago

    by Naima

    Thank you everyone for your comments this really helps I will take it a use it constructively!!! Thankx

  • 18 years ago

    by Switchblade89

    good poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by Naima

    ok, thanx for eveyones honest feedback!