WOW! I liked this a lot. It was so sad...
Love always,
Haily
xoxoxoxo

ok like i said i can be mean nd i can praise but at the mo i dont no???
its a good start and had emotion but maybe if you put it into stanzas and and made the sentences around the same length it would flow better...i tell alot of people this but sometimes a poem just comes from nowhere and you need to work at the first draft to improve....theres always room for improvment....hope i helped and wasn harsh...it had good meaning to it(the poem) it was emotional and from the heart the way poems should be x)

Thanx everyone. This one really meant a lot to me so yeah I'm very happy that this so far seems to be my best work, but I know that there's room for improvements so thanx

Great job!! you did very good and I found this one the best of the other one I read! great job!! 5/5!

The flow of this poem, is totally insane. That's pretty awesome. It blends with the style. I like it :)

Thanx Darien!!! awww im so crushin' on u!!!*sighs* it's a giddy schoolgurl thing... r u single? write back please... i hope this doesn't sound weird....

Very gripping....well done indeed.

thanx!!!