Oh, cool poem...

an invador in gell cap form
with an agenda programmed by a scientist
to break down my will
to be me

I loved that part...And the rhyming scheme was pretty nice, and matched the flow very well..

great job..keep it up

Your a great writter liked the poem

you are getting way to vauge to even understand. Your lofty words don't mean much if you can't even understand the message you are trying to convey. Ok You may hate me for this but what is the message in this poem because I am vecked. I think I would need a bach. degree to understand this.

em....is it okay if i suggest something??????*waits for answer* well im guna anyways, make the sentences the same length and aadd a little more emotion....im not being harsh but im sure you can make this better :D i voted 4 sorry?

lisa you don't know anything about writing.

Well Robert, when i read this poem i think of anti-depressants.

"to make my days more tranquil
a pill for my body to fake it
so another time i can take it"

and

"an invador in gell cap form
with an agenda programmed by a scientist
to break down my will
to be me "

the message is pretty clear to me.