Down the Drain

by Piper   Jun 15, 2005


One day i was putting on
makeup in front of my bathroom sink
i was in a rush i was out of time
no time to even think

i was putting things down picking things up
i was totally insane
i knocked down my wedding ring
and it headed down the drain

i teared through the pipes i cut my hand
looking for that thing
i bumped my head thousands of times
and finally found the ring

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  • 18 years ago

    by NoPatience

    hehehe. good. no deep meaning. it shuld be under the funny catagory tho. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Wow. This was really nice...It can also be symbolic too...and that is what is good. I thought about it as you were going too fast with your relationship and your love or ring went down the drain. lol. it was still good. xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    Nicely written, it flowed nicely and you kept it really intesting! good job! i give 5/5! btw, nice picture of ginobili! he's really awesome! haha

  • 18 years ago

    by Nici

    I think that there are places in this poem where the rhythm seems to falter. Also there seems to be some punctuation missing i.e. commas. However the concept works well.

    Stay Inspired
    Nici

  • 18 years ago

    by metuka

    Cute poem! I LIKED IT