Amazing job. but i'm really lost with this poem to tell you the truth. Like i understand the beginning and then all of a sudden like it switches i mean i shouldn't be talking but still. I dunno who knows. but you did an amazing job. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.
Okay once again i love how you write your true feelings down i think your a very talented writer it was a bit choppy but if i was your friend and you wrote this for me i would be thrilled it is very thoughtful and the idea itself and the kindness and the thought that you actually appriciate these people gets this poem a 5/5 on its own great job
The beginning has nothing to do with the poem, so it adds kind of a shadowy cast. you should take away the first two stanzas and add more to your emotions of being a prisoner. if you're free to roam, (like you mentioned in the third stanza,) your not really a prisoner. you need to revise this one a bit.