AMAZING ending, I love it. Keep it up <33 5/5. If you want to read my work leave me a comment on my "Deleted my poems" thing and Ill give you my new name
-xoxo-

*crying* I love it! That is so sad.. I lovers you! 5/5.. Keep up the good work sweets *hugs and kisses*

~Jessica

The ending was very good!! the poem was good too.. i gave ya a 5/5.. bye bye EJ.. oh thanks for commenting on mine it means alot!!

This is so sad. But I know how you feel, I've felt it. Try to stay strong. Xx

Very well done I loved it

That's a different point of view to write from. I like that. Very unique piece. I enjoyed all of it. I don't have much else to say as I think it's perfect the way it is. Very nicely done!

i love the last two lines! the is a great ending! but in line 5, "you're" shouldn't have an appostraphe! but this one is a 5!

hf!! this is so sad!! omg here comes atear its so beautifuly written flow was wonderful omg sad sad sad!! love it! 5/5

Nice twist on the end.

Not bad at all. :)

Some of your rhymes threw me off, I didn't expect the change but none of them were bad. What I mean is the first two lines rhymed well, but I kept expecting you to use a different word at the end of the next line than what was really there. If that made any sense to you whatsoever you are more intelligent than most. lol

Well, the thought behind it is good, especially considering the ending part, which was really well written...

As for the rest of the poem, much of the rhyming seemed forced..

I would honestly like to see you write a poem like this without being bound by the aabb, 4 stanza thing...

And there are some clichès that somehow ruins the feeling I get...

But that's just me..

People seem to like it...

(this is critisism)

keep it up

gave me chill bumps at the end. u've even given me an idea on a poem, thnks.

this poem was well written.. the ending was strong and powerful.. i got a little confused in the beginning but then that ending jus cleared it all up for me... great job!..

This is a great poem! It flows very nicely together! I enjoyed it thoroughly!

Omg beautiful poem... i really liked the ending...very sad though..lol...5/5 oh and thanks for commenting on my poems i really appreciate it!!! luv yas mwah...

-kayla-

Very good poem, harsh ending that gave me chills, nice going:)

Best wishes,
Patrik

Wow... another great poem... loved it...
take care, xoxoxo

Hey great poem. Get use of emotions and the words you used, kepp up the good work..im an aswome writer. Im adding you to my favorites!
Juls

Hey, I 'd liek to say this is such an amazing poem. It has so much feeling and depth. You expressed yourself so well in this poem and nothin seemed forced in anyway. I really liked th lines:

"The pain in my chest seems to get worse
I know that I'm tainted, I know that I'm cursed
My love for you has never faltered or broken
But I'm not the one you care for, for your heart, she has spoken"

Just the way you worded this stanza, wonderful. Your vocabulary and flow were very well done and I hope that you never stop writing. Your a talented writer. Keep up the awesome work!! 5/5
~Luvz~
~Angie~
xoxo