Very well written! I have a poem it's a day to day story told by the unborn child and then it ends with abortion. I didn't write it or post it but it really makes a person think.Very sad. Just like your poem it makes the reader think! Good detail as well! Take Care! Brooke~

awwww thats sad but its such a great poem, i thought u did an excellent joba nd it flowed so well, keep up the great work, i hope to read more soon

awww thats sad ima cry now lol jp but it was great 5/5

I was a bit confused at first reading this, but then when I got to the end and things were clairified and I went back through to read it again. I thought it was good. Nice flow to it and definently a good job on the poems meaning. There were some times where the rhyme seemed forced, but it wasn't as badly forced as other I have seen. Over all good job. Keep writing.

thanks for checking out my poems =D I voted a 5 for this one and If you got time please check out my other poem "My dad: dead and gone forever" thanks again!! hugs

wow.. that was really deep.. and you were right it did make sense once you went back to the begining.. b/c i was so lost and didnt understand but then i read the begining again and it was like woah!! amazing and very well written.. thanks for commenting on my poem!! it really means alot to me.. thanks so much.. bye bye EJ

wow GREAT POEM!! 5/5 LOVED IT! Keep it up you got talent!
*BECKY*

this is an interesting way to put a poem together. it is very good. another 5/5

WoW......WOW that was an amazing poem im really against abortion. 5* Please read my poem lost soul it would mean a lot and tell me what you think thanks. Much Luv, Manda

wow! i like this poem

Wow really amazing...You were right, didn't get it the first time, but after starting over again I finally got it!!! That was excellent, what a great idea =0)

*Hugs Sabrina*

Ah, I understood it. Read through it twice just to make sure. Very creative. I like how you put yourself in place of the character. You're a great writer. Awesome job. 5/5.

~rolo

i took me a while to understand it but it's still really good. well done!