Comments : It’ll all be on you

  • 18 years ago

    by Johnny Marlin

    Again, wonderful poem, you certainly have a way with words. I like your style of writing, very descriptive and fluent, I had a beautiful picture painted in my head the entire time. Take care.
    -J.M.

  • 18 years ago

    by wendy

    I thought this poem was very good

  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Love the overall feeling/image i got from this. very clear due to the structure and words you chose..

    Wilted petals
    Fallen to the precious dirt

    petals,.. i always think its cliche to use rose/flowers/petals in your poems, but thats just me and my style.. on contrast, i like the idea of it falling.. especially "precious" dirt.. although i'd like to know if theres a reason u used precious, and if so, why.. maybe go into that more.. idunn0..

    Wearing thin, deteriate(deteriorate*) into nothing

    i also think u should extend this deterioration over more of the piece, as it's a main idea, and a good one.. i liked the way this one flowed and like i said before, the imagery. good job.. 4.5

  • 18 years ago

    by Atomic

    You have some good imagery going on for you. At first I thought you were talking about death, but reading all the comments, it made more sence that you are writing of a rose. Job well done, M'Lovely.

    ( )_( )
    (='.'=)
    (")-(") Arrivederci!

  • 17 years ago

    by Spoken Silence

    Very nice.... great way to present the feelings of wanting to be nothing..... 4/5