Comments : Through the Innocent’s Mind

  • 12 years ago

    by ShaeBaeBae

    Hey,not bad,not bad.But where is the feeling?where's the action? why are you writing this? your tlling of someone killing someone.any one with a brain could do that. but why is he killing you? think about these questions.

  • 12 years ago

    by Solace

    Very nicely written as always.. Defiantly one of my favorites.. Creative and full of emotion.. Keep writing and take care (always))xx:

    *> : PainOfOne

  • 12 years ago

    by Fighter

    wow... another amazing piece!!!
    -xXx-

  • 12 years ago

    by EpithetPoet

    A story more than anything else. But a very captivating one at that. Loved the ending.
    -A

  • 12 years ago

    by katie!

    Wow both of those were amazing, and pretty scary from each perspective, brilliant work, well done to you..

    xxxxx

  • 12 years ago

    by ღ.:Krissy:.ღ

    That was amazing Andrea! This poem was so awesome. I loved how you wrote it. It was so descriptive and I could picture in my mind everything that was going on throughout the poem. Just amazing job! I wuv you! <33

    ~Krissy

    *hugs*

  • 12 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    pure genius

  • 12 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    you did a beautiful job showing what both people were thinking and how well you fit them together! i give you credit! but you are one of my favorite poets on here and as i read your pieces of work i can definately see why you are on that list! can't wait to see more from you!!

    ~PLP~ lil slam~ lots of hugs and love~

  • 12 years ago

    by Iyla

    omigoodness! i'm going to have nightmares! ><
    good job!! 5/5
    -kit <33

  • 12 years ago

    by Alissa

    wow I don't know how you do it but everytime I read your poems I get chills...you have a lot of talented you should be proud