Comments : Love is where you are... !

  • 12 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    Beautifully written poem! The only thing I think might help the reader is if you broke it up into stanzas. It would be a little easier to read! It just my opinion though! You did an amazing job. I look forward to reading more or your poetry! Hope you'll post more soon! Take Care! Brooke~ =)

  • 12 years ago

    by shannon

    awww i really do like this poem...5/5!!! keep it up

  • 12 years ago

    by Natalie84

    The ideas are great but I have a few suggestions:
    “whenever a garden's tended” Maybe “to” should be after tended.

    The commas and periods after each line aren’t really necessary either.
    You should do a spell check. But more importantly you shouldn’t use shortened words like “cuz” in your poetry. That can some times give people the wrong impression of you. I don’t read poetry when people write like that and many others within this site feel the same way, so just keep that in mind.

    Also to make the poem flow better and a little easier to read you could break the poem up into stanzas. That would help a lot I think.

    You are the writer and I can only give suggestions. It's your call...

    I really did like this piece as it offers so much love and will make the reader smile. I’d say very good start…and you’ll only get better with time. Nice write! :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Britney

    Well thats a great start for your first poem on here! I truly loved your poem. Stanza's may help but your poem not having stanza's also makes it differnent from everybody elses. Stanza's would break it up more and make your point more clear... but is def. the writers choice. I think it reads fine without them. So keep up the good writing oyur off to a great start!

  • 12 years ago

    by Natalie84

    SEE! Already better! Nicely done!

  • 12 years ago

    by erikka baby

    Beauitful poem. I absolutley loved it! I can really relate to this too. xX

  • 12 years ago

    by nikki

    good poem really good 5/5 keep up the good work.

  • 12 years ago

    by fallen angel

    your poem was really good, im glad you asked me to read it. you have a really good talent. i look forwrd to reading more of your poems, and rating them too. do the same for me ty

    xxx vikki xxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Katie

    good,i dont rhyme so sorry

  • 12 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    Very well written, I can see why its 5.0 with 17 votes, nicely done! keep that kind of work going!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Britney

    Wow very nice poem. You could tell that all your emotion was in that! The ending truly was something though But this poem was awesome! 5/5!

  • 12 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Great write I really enjoyed it..I loved how you say all the things bout love it rocks!
    the flow was way good and I enjoyed reading it, it put a smile on my face, Thank you :)

    x)

  • 12 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    WOW!WOW!WOW! THis is soooo beautiful. I'm speechless. No flaws. Amazing work!

    Much Love
    ~*hAiLy*~

  • 12 years ago

    by JodiieBaybeh

    Fabulous poem ... i loved it

  • 12 years ago

    by sadnessinshadows

    I liked it... when you're in love, you see everything as wonderful and full of love! and does love really change a person that much?

  • 12 years ago

    by Andrea

    Awww its soooo cute. i was all sad from reading the other one...now im like happy. your an awesome writer with lots of talents

  • 12 years ago

    by ~*Curious Me*~

    Very cute poem.I love this one.Thanks for commentiing on my poem.5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    Aw this was so sweet.....great job...love the flow it was the shit!! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Very sweet and tender, nice job. Though I'm not a fan of repetitive parts. keep it up

  • 12 years ago

    by HansRik

    I loved this poem. You are truly a great poet. Very fluent, and it really seems like you considered everyone's comments in order to improve your already good work. Keep it up!