Comments : Your in Control

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashli

    nice job! you have a lot of talent! keep it up!

  • 18 years ago

    by ChevyCowgirl23

    this poem is da bomb!!!! ya rock!!! Amanda

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm.. I would love to see what you come up with when you write without rhymes. You do that so well, you should try something new.

  • 18 years ago

    by ---AL---

    So smooth a flawless with a good theme. Thanks for the good read 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by abcede

    oooooh, very cool! i like this poem, it's original and so true! awesome job!
    love always,
    abcede

  • 18 years ago

    by natalie

    Yay that was really good :D i liked it a lot and had a lot of good things to say :D yay!!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    this was excellent! its so true and so many dont even realize it you did a great job getting your msg across the only advise i give is to work on even ing your flow the rhyming scheme change at least 3 times but still 5/5!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Stacinator

    This poem i made go w/2 rhyme schemes.. i know how to keep a pattern.. i just wanted to change it :P

  • 18 years ago

    by Andrea

    good poem, nice rhyming...5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Andrea

    good poem, nice rhyming...5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by undying blusher

    Very nice...good message you put in there...and it flows well.

    xxx

  • nice work!
    luv courtie

  • 18 years ago

    by Johnny Marlin

    awesome poem, very true. take care

  • 18 years ago

    by Delo

    I don't know what to say.. this poem is great... it's very inspiering

  • 18 years ago

    by the middle

    Awesome poem!! i really liked it! it flowed well with a great theme.
    take care, xoxoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by Torn

    That was awesome!! i agree i think..something to think about for sure.
    take care x x x

  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Good beginning, liked the flow and the way the words came out.. in the second stanza, i think the last line should be changed to

    And get ready for flight

    just because of syllable differences and i think it'd help the flow..

    You're behind the wheel
    It's up to you where you take it

    liked the ongoing metaphor of driving a car, even th0 its only in a few lines.. its so true.. the last stanza ends it with nothing but truth.. good poem.. basically all i can say.. third poem ive read of yours and theyre all about life.. i can never write like that with any real accuracy.. good job.. 5/5.. pZ