Kiss Me One Last Time

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jul 15, 2005


Give me my last breath through yours,
Kiss me one last time.
Don't let me die without your love,
Let me see this light above.
You're everything to me,
But what am I to you?
I'm ready to share a life with you,
Will you just say 'I do'?
My heart aches without you,
I can't breathe at all,
I ask you for your care
And for a life with you to share.
Please accept me for what I say,
You're perfect in every way
And you mean the world to me;
Don't you see?
I need you and only
I never want to loose you,
But I'm afraid I've all ready lost you;
Tell me it's not true?
Just kiss me gently,
Be my everything.
Share forever with me,
You're exactly what I need.
I'll try to never hurt you again,
And when I do
Know it's because I'm scared to loose you.
Love me gently
And hold me close,
Tell me you love me
And I'll love you most.

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  • 17 years ago

    by xXx Allison xXx

    I kinda have to agree with some of what tinyheart said, but not all of it. i didn't want to read all the way through the poem, because i was going to cry. but i did read the first and last few lines, and that was enough. it was, is, a very disturbing poem, and it most certainly does make one think.
    thanks for sharing that with us!!

  • 17 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    Good write. It doesn't flow or rhyme as well as your others do but its still amazing. Nice job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    All your poems are good! donno what else to say! but keep writting! keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    I think this was a very sad and sweet poem, it showed true emotion. buut, there were some things i think you need to improve upon. the 'you' sound at the end of many lines was slightly annoying, i think that you need to expand your vocabulary. the language was nto very interesting.. it was straighforward, and unless this is the type you want it to be (i dont think you do) i think you need to substitute some words.

    on another note- there were a few spelling errors- loose should be lose.. (loose is like a loose shoe lace, ))

    alsooo-I need you and only *shouldnt it say something here?*
    I never want to *lose* you,
    if im wrong about missing a word, then i think the line should read
    'i need you only' or some other placement. something, this line doesnt fit too well.

    also. in the poem i felt many ideas were.. repeated.. it felt sort of like you didnt know how to say what you were saying- or that you didnt know what to say.

    overally., i dont think this was/is your best..

    =|

    4/5

    *Th*

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    Okay this was a good poem, again good ideas that are easy to relate too...the only thing i think its you need to expand your vocab rhyming words like true and you love above care share, will only get you so far they are completly okay to use but you also need to use more interesting words and having the ability to rhyme bigger words is a task...but thats what thesaurus's and dictionaries are for even though im sure sitting down to read a dictionary isnt your idea of fun maybe a thesauarus would help you immensly...something to work on....4/5

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