Brown Eyes (Eintou)

by †JustAri†   Jul 29, 2005


Brown eyes
The light takes hold
Chocolate-mahogany
In delicious retrospective
The lovely creation
Represents all
Beauty

*I think there's something i want to change about this piece...any suggestions are very welcome.

© Copyright Ariana 2003-2005

Eintou:
African American style poetry.
Line 1 - 2 syllables
Line 2 - 4 syllables
Line 3 - 6 syllables
Line 4 - 8 syllables
Line 5 - 6 syllables
Line 6 - 4 syllables
Line 7 - 2 syllables

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  • 18 years ago

    by ElegantlyWasted

    It seems to me this piece is trying to describe the look in someones eyes; yet forgot to exactly describe it. You did a great job on this one - but i lost the concept of the brown eyes and beauty. ^_^ Don't change anything though, its still another well written verse.

    Luvooo <333.
    /Kal.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    ahhh i see you are trying the different types of poems! thats real cool. i'm going to take a class about poetry prolly my senior year since thats the only time i have to fit it in so far that is where i can learn the different styles. but it's cool that your taking ur own time to figure these all out! congrates to you lol! i did one by myself and that was a tripplet or something like that lol! i rally like the write about brown eyes, i have blue but this is very cool and creative.

    ~PLP~ lil slam~

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