Comments : Exacto Knife

  • 18 years ago

    by lostlllsoul

    u express it so well
    nicely done...
    keep writting
    hope to see more of ur work=)
    if u could pls check out my poems
    thanx
    lots of love

  • 18 years ago

    by ღ*KiM*ღ

    Nice write, the verse lines "it's my job.
    I cut the labels that
    we paste to our foreheads. " were really effective, as when you first start reading the impression of a cutting poem springs to mind, but these 3 verse lines sets that straight. I had to read it twice from a different point of view once I had established that it was not in fact a cutting poem, and kept in mind that it was about the labels we get. Nice, and original.
    Also, the form and technique you have used is unusual from the type I usually stumble across, was nice to read a difference. Kim x

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    I made some changes, thanks for the recommendations.

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Wow, this was a great idea. its very original and i liked where you said about the labels.
    This was very well written, and the flow wasn't bad :D

    x)

  • 18 years ago

    by Sapphire

    It was okay, ive read a lot of your other poems, this isnt one of your best though. There is a good flow to it I give you that.

  • 18 years ago

    by zay

    that good man

  • 18 years ago

    by Lance Hardy

    Awesome poem there Mr. Allen. Better keep up the good work or else someone may have to smite you...when he comes back =(. Keep it up, cya around.

  • 18 years ago

    by Aken Sol

    Yeh, i dig it.

    Aken Sol

  • 18 years ago

    by Lyla

    As you probablt know they are alot of cutting poems on this site but this one seems to be different from the rest. You did a good job of making a widely used topic unique. I may not have got some of it but that might be my own stupidity. Good job

  • 18 years ago

    by SweetSuicide

    Hey nice poem..very crative and alot of emotion.in it..great job..5/5.plz comment on any of my poems..

  • 18 years ago

    by Katlynn

    You expressed yourself very well but to me i didn't really liked this one and didn't make any sense to me. I mean most of my poems don't make sense anyway so i shouldn't be talking but mm i personally didn't like this one that much. I mean good ideas and stuff. But you said you weren't depressed but if you weren't then you wouldn't have cut yourself so yeah. But anyway keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

  • 18 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    I liked this poem...i liked how you said at the end the little note about trying to figure out what it's really about...i didnt like how i didnt rhyme very well thiough...and the flow wasnt so hott....but other then that it was really good...4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Very interesting.. it sound like someone breaking away from what society tells them they should be going. cutting away from the social cloth which is our lives. wonderful, about a person who isnt afraid to be different and stand up for their tommro. wonderful work I loved it ~5~

  • 18 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    This is a very intriguing and thought provoking piece. I really like the ending, overall it's brilliant! Keep it up~Holly

  • 17 years ago

    by AGirlWorthFightingFor

    Hmm. my brother once cut his nose with an exacto knife. accidentily. um, he was actually stabbing our couch. he was 2. nothing to do with the poem. this is just what I think of when I hear the words "exacto knife."

    Great Shakespearean references.

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Lol, I figured this poem wasn't about cutting. It was really good though, I liked the 'hidden' message you were trying to send out to other people.. well at least what I got from it was 'labelling' haha. Good stuff

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Hm.. I don't really know what this is about. I know it doesn't sound like self infliction. But it was great that you made it like this. It really makes the reader think about it. Awesome job. And thanks for the honest comments, Very appreciated =] 5/5

    `Taleee

  • 17 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    I thought this poem was very, unique and creative. I loved the concept of it, and thought the rythym and flows was rather good.

  • 17 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    I think this would make a good song.. It has something about it.. I don't agree with some of the above comments.. it doesn't need to have any flow, as it already has it in its order. There is a poignancy about it, and it's so deep, that I can see how others can put the wrong connotations upon your words, however, it reads beautifully. Well done, this is 5/5 without a doubt. xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Serina the Squid

    "no i'm not sad" is a weak line and seems forced and doesnt fit

    "I cut the labels that
    we paste to our foreheads." strong ending, perfect.

    Are you cutting a book? Seems silly, but in today's generation books are dying, they do have labels and they are labeled as well as thick.