Comments : Haiku #44

  • 18 years ago

    by Lance Hardy

    Rawr

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Lol

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    (not a haiku btw)

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awww.. i loved this! it was so powerful and beautiful.. very nice use of words, made it an enjoyable read! the only thing is, the second part only has two lines and it should have three..

    Waves leaves rocks scattered, broken
    ^ i think it should be "leave"

    And drags pieces down.
    ^ and "drag"

    great poem, very energising and interesting! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Aken Sol

    Thanks Jessy. Fine Sean!

    Poem is actually suppose to be called Tanka #44

  • 17 years ago

    by Misstress

    Superb Haiku.
    Good work!

    God Bless!

  • 16 years ago

    by Hatori

    I like the idea and you should probably change the title to Tanka #44, just so that people don't mistake this poem as a haiku. I ike these two lines the most:

    Find my teardrop in the sea
    If you want me to forget.

    Great job, and keep it up! 5/5

    With all due respect,
    Hatori
    The Illusionist