Weeping Deeply(slam)

This is a slam, so critique it as that,.. thanx and i know it is sorta vague, but too vague?

time slowed down to an eventual still image of what everything could and should be,
rains ceased to fall, i parted the way, paved til eternity.
the trees swayed with magnificent malevolence,
magnetized to the spot where we once laid, slow motion was broken as night darkened day.

you forced your self into real time with the real world. lifted by the absence of gravity, i was pinned down by the dagger of despair. feeling you run thru time, the pierced flesh is beckoning, numb to my own emotions. beckoning to see, to flee from the runaway hope. i opened my eyes for just a moments pleasure, only to realize you. the trees staggered and withered, leafs bowing their head to natures inevitability. i gathered the strength, driven by a faint recollection of a false self-perception. realization kicks in, opening my eyes; it devastates within. i cringe at the feet of my creator, weeping deeply at the thought thats no longer later.