Your vague writing style is what makes your poems great, im afraid i'm addicted to your poetry now.

"rains ceased to fall,"
just have "rain" instead of "rains," you'll get caught up on the s - c sounds being right next to each other, and "rains" isn't so grammatically correct anyway.

"i parted the way, paved til eternity."
I liked the parted/paved alliteration

"magnificent malevolence,
magnetized"
yeah and that alliteration too

"magnetized to the spot where we once laid, slow motion"
"lay" not "laid"

"beckoning to see, to flee from the runaway hope"
nice rhyme

"leafs bowing their head to natures"
"leaves" not "leafs"

I thought the ending could have tied it up a bit better, but besides that it was slick and great.