Quite an interesting piece. I love it how you try out new techinques and interesting ways of getting thoughts across. You amaze me :D

- Love yah heaps girlie.
Take care aye, hope you're doing alright :)

*Kalah.

Hehe a cute and playful poem with a slightly dismal charm. very nice :)
-A

I think the title is fine. Very good, in fact. I love the imagery you use... except it makes me feel all icky and wanting to turn the A/C up!

Sorry to nitpick, but since it's a form poem, I have to.

The last stanza is missing a line. It should be abbaA, and you have abaA.

All in all, it's a very good Rondel! Just liek with my own form poems, I like it more each time I read it!

Aak!

Thanks so much for the correction, Ann Marie! :D I'll be fixing it soon. :P

//Ari\\

Nice fix, Ari! You've inspired me to try a rondel!