Comments : My Revoltion of Summer (Rondel)

  • 12 years ago

    by ElegantlyWasted

    Quite an interesting piece. I love it how you try out new techinques and interesting ways of getting thoughts across. You amaze me :D

    - Love yah heaps girlie.
    Take care aye, hope you're doing alright :)

    *Kalah.

  • 12 years ago

    by EpithetPoet

    Hehe a cute and playful poem with a slightly dismal charm. very nice :)
    -A

  • 12 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    I think the title is fine. Very good, in fact. I love the imagery you use... except it makes me feel all icky and wanting to turn the A/C up!

    Sorry to nitpick, but since it's a form poem, I have to.

    The last stanza is missing a line. It should be abbaA, and you have abaA.

    All in all, it's a very good Rondel! Just liek with my own form poems, I like it more each time I read it!

  • 12 years ago

    by †JustAri†

    Aak!

    Thanks so much for the correction, Ann Marie! :D I'll be fixing it soon. :P

    //Ari\\

  • 12 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Nice fix, Ari! You've inspired me to try a rondel!