Comments : My sorrow

  • 18 years ago

    by SethM

    I feel your pain and sorrow. You have the right to feel that way, but your just too drastic. I think you should try to think of something other than boys or cutting yourself when you write your poems. Make up an experience to write about completly forget your life when you write. It may be your poem, your work, and your soul on the page, but I think from reading your poems that you could make up a story of a happily married couple, or a couple that just broke up and want to get back together but they think that it would be a bad idea. You know, those are just a few ideas that I think you could make work, or you could continue doing what you currently do, i guess it works for you. Just my oppinion.

    Without Wax,
    Seth

  • 18 years ago

    by Emily

    Really emotional and describes all the actions of the guy. Great adjectives and examples of what happens.

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashton

    I lik it alot it is really good
    kep writing