Comments : The destitute

  • 18 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    The very first poem i wrote when i was in school

  • 18 years ago

    by Loulou

    Good poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Letty

    Another great work of art from you. You are amazing. There are a few suggestions that I want to make. The first one is that I think you should try to break this poem up into two stanzas. That way the other readers want have a hard time following it. The second thing is You should always capitalize your I's. Other then that I see no other errors. I think the flow is wonderful, the picture is clear, and that this is completely beautiful. 5/5

    You have a amazing talent for writing. I would love to read more of your work. I am waiting for you to submit new poems so that I can add you to my favorites.

    I know that you did not get a chance to enter my last contest so I will start a new one after I'm done judging this one.

    I hope that you take the time to enter.

    Keep up the beautiful work that you are doing.

    Love & best wishes
    Letty

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    What a sad and uplifting write. This is really heart touching.
    Excellent!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by Lune de ma vie

    Amazing write. So beautiful.