Comments : Lullaby

  • 16 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    This poem is brilliant:

    That same song is perfect still,
    The rhymes in every line,
    The rhythm of your heartbeat,
    All twirl and intertwine.

    ^^^The first stanza had be captivated straight away, the flow and the pace are just perfect.

    Well done on a superb piece of writing.

    Warmest regards,

    Steve

  • 16 years ago

    by sarenightmarexx

    This is really good, written well, a song that comforts me is called lullaby, its in my poem its "everythings gonna be alright" yer, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Viola

    I am amazed at this poem. It is so very true.
    This stanza, I find, is the best:
    "You play it when you're lonely,
    It always jerks those tears,
    A song still strumming heart-strings,
    After all these many years."
    ^So perfectly worded..and so very true. It's beautiful and sad all at once. I definitely feel this way about certain songs. You captured the emotion perfectly. The ending is also fabulous. What a great poem. Keep it up! =]
    --Viola

  • 14 years ago

    by mandy

    Beautiful. 5/5