Roberth,
Great poem 5/5 Thank you for sharing and always keep it up ^_^ Take care and can't wait to read more! :-)

Excellent 5/5!! Like Always I Love Reading Your Work Keep Writing And I Will Deffinitly Keep Commenting!!!

Robert,
You're blessed with talent that is a pleasure to read. great job....

hugs, love, Ann

Great job! I really loved this poem! You've got alot of talent...keep it up! Feel Free to check out my poems if you get the chance! :)

I liked it a lot and thought the repetition was pretty effective.. nice flow to it.. from a lot of your works, i see you use commas a lot to augment flow.. to me it is a kind of distraction on first-read, but it does direct the flow.. probably just your style but yea.. the last line of the first stanza seems a bit weird.. you changed the syntax to help the flow, and it worked well, but it just seems a bit awkward where you placed 'her'.. all in all an awesome poem and good use of the technique.. later

That was a really nice read. great poem