This was a really sad poem...and im so sorry that had to happen(that is if its true ha) to you....thats such a heart breaking thing....the flow was great the only thing i didnt like was when you said not a breath that came from your face.....the face part dosnt sound really good...you might wanna fugure out a better way to describe that....5/5

The only minor mistake i've found in this poem was in the last sentance; 'broke' should be 'broken'. thats about it; the poem was amazing in a sad way. i'm so sorry if this poem is true

I loved the poem, and it was SOOOO sad. I don't think u should change the word "broke" to broken, it sounds great like it is!

Good Writing!
beth

I loved the poem as sad as it was.

This is a well written dark poem. It is sad but I can tell you are candid with your feelings

Good work dave... touching...the way u end it.. of course no one can heal from a broken heart... i think u meant God's plans ...not plane/...
do pls comment on my poem "murder or suicide"
thanks a ton
amy

Wow..this is so sad..but its a great poem..it almost made me cry...5/5 deffinately
Becky
xoxo

Tragic and well written. Im watching my 2 girls as I write this just thinking how blessed I am and how much pain there must be in the loss of a child. Every parents worst fear. 5/5

That is unbeleivably sad. I can't even imagine how you must feel. You did a great job at conveying your feelings, especially in the beginning when you say "a face you will not see" and about him never breathing. I can't imagine how hard it must have been to write this, but I'm glad you did, because It's made me look at different struggles people go through. Not once have I ever paid any mind to those greiving lost loved ones, especially those who never even got the chance to live.

Take Care,
Renee

Aww this is so good... Your writing is SOOOO much better than mine... lol... mine pretty much.. like sucks... but you are older than me... hmmm... yes you are new here and you have MORE comments than me... lmao... thats pretty funny... well i'll ttul dave...
jessica

Again, nise poem. This is really different to the poem of yours i read. You've still expressed yourself well but in a different way and this is actually really sad !!!
It's beautifully written though and i like it alot.

XxX Cici XxX

That's so sad! But must say this is a well written poem.

Aw, Wow. This was sad. I hope it's not true..

There's nothing I can find wrong in the piece. I thought it was written really well. Keep it up =) 5/5

`Taleee.

Fabulous!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!love the emotion and its was so sad.. great expressing ur feelings to this poet... 5/5