Comments : Lucky Friends of Mine, The Leaves (Multiple Haiku)

  • Ari! *Hugs* I Love The Way You Display Nature In Such Color Bound Descriptions, The Imagery Of This Poem Reached Perfection While Capturing Your Heart *Keep It Up Your Great* 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

  • 12 years ago

    by Renee

    I DON'T LIKE THIS POEM!

    Only because it reminds me of school buses X-P

    but other than that, it was purely -amazing- I really could depict the leaves falling and crumpling, stationary in their solitude, waiting for a crisp autumn breeze (or a big wind from an oncoming yellow school bus o.O) to move it from it's spot. And the rythm of the poem gave it a morning-orange feel to it, if that makes ANY sense o.O I'm in a very symbolic mood right now.

    Take Care,
    Renee

  • 12 years ago

    by ElegantlyWasted

    "The damage done there
    Until the wind finally
    Forces them to fly"

    - I took this stanza out as the part that i could relate to. I know it sounds completley mental but it's like someone's been hurt for so long and finally they have been told to/or decided to get over it and move on.

  • 12 years ago

    by Stormy

    WOW! this was so beautiful i absolutly loved it! i love poems about nature the're my fav. keep up the amazing Job!

    God Bless!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Wow, wow and hell wow! This is so goooooodd! Nothing to critique, just loved it! ^0^

    Warmest regards,

    Steve

  • 12 years ago

    by Fighter

    Hey! i know it's been a while... but you're poems are still as amazing as always.

    "Hesitant of change
    They rustle softly, mourning
    A suffering chance

    Their snapped stems have bled
    Their cradles of themselves curve
    Dry, empty but used"

    ...beautiful.
    -xXx-

  • 12 years ago

    by JJ

    You managed to depict the beauty of leaves in every way. I have so many favorite stanzas...its all beautiful! I have no critisism to offer. You're ahead of the game...write on girl!

  • 12 years ago

    by Ann Stareyes

    Absolutely Beautiful....Your talent surely shows with this beautiful
    piece...I truly loved these 2 stanzas...

    "Hesitant of change
    They rustle softly, mourning
    A suffering chance

    Their snapped stems have bled
    Their cradles of themselves curve
    Dry, empty but used"

    Awesome job....
    hugs, love, Ann

  • 11 years ago

    by Lemma

    Wow! amazing i didn't realise i hadn't commented on this one but it's great! I really don't know how you have the patience to write these haikus coz i've never been able to do it. Keep it up n look forward to reading more.

    Em xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Carlee Ann

    Gorgeous. I really liked this, it's nice to see such an amazing arrangement of haiku. I had to comment on your work after you made me smile quite a few times in the "I Smiled today Because" Post. Hehe. Have a great day!

    Car

  • 11 years ago

    by mkml

    Beautiful. Great use of Haiku style. You are an awesome poet, I love your poetry!

    5/5
    Your Thunder Thigh friend,
    Chelsey. =]