but other than that, it was purely -amazing- I really could depict the leaves falling and crumpling, stationary in their solitude, waiting for a crisp autumn breeze (or a big wind from an oncoming yellow school bus o.O) to move it from it's spot. And the rythm of the poem gave it a morning-orange feel to it, if that makes ANY sense o.O I'm in a very symbolic mood right now.
"The damage done there
Until the wind finally
Forces them to fly"
- I took this stanza out as the part that i could relate to. I know it sounds completley mental but it's like someone's been hurt for so long and finally they have been told to/or decided to get over it and move on.
Wow! amazing i didn't realise i hadn't commented on this one but it's great! I really don't know how you have the patience to write these haikus coz i've never been able to do it. Keep it up n look forward to reading more.
Gorgeous. I really liked this, it's nice to see such an amazing arrangement of haiku. I had to comment on your work after you made me smile quite a few times in the "I Smiled today Because" Post. Hehe. Have a great day!