Comments : You fall in my tear

  • 18 years ago

    by Rusted x Heart

    Very nicely written. The rhyme scheme was a little hard to follow at times but the message was clear and it was a very nice topic to write about. I especially loved the last stanza, and how it reffers back to the beginning. Nicely done!

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    Yeah so im definatly jealous!!!!!!!!!! this is amazing....all your poems are amaxing...5/5 for sure keep this up i really enjoy reading your work!

  • 18 years ago

    by Ali

    Wow!!! Awesome poem! You're great poet 5/5 for that, hope to read more soon!!! Keep it up!!

    Ali

  • 18 years ago

    by Atomic

    Excellent poem, I especially like the ending, the last stanza. Lots of emotions there.

    I really have no complaints for this poem. =)

    ( )_( )
    (='.'=)
    (")-(") Arrivederci!

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    OMG these are amazing lines.
    Keep writing.
    5/5.

  • 18 years ago

    by ratchild666

    I love the title of this poem, and ideals in the poem itself compliment it perfectly. i love how the last line puts a more confident edge on the poem, while at the same time contradicting it.
    stef/xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Dean Russell-Rands

    Lovely poem - it gave a real sense of emotion and I enjoyed reading it 5/5 =)

  • 18 years ago

    by Dreams

    This is one feels when one lost the love of their life. Heartfelt poem I must say.

    'I love you, I miss you
    But I'm not going to cry.'
    These lines perfectly bring out the meaning of this poem.

    Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece. =)

  • 18 years ago

    by Little Dot

    You did a really good job expressing your emotions in this poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I also love this one. I love how you write. The last stanza is flawless.

    Great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Serenical Darkness

    You are pouring out talent and its been my privaledge to read these keep em comming

    jeremy

  • 17 years ago

    by Bloomed Rose

    Beautiful poem! I would have have to say definately 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wow! I'm speechless. This was a fantastic peice. I thought the flow was great! Didn't feel rocky at all. And I loved the way you expressed your emotions in this one. It was very well written. Pleasure to read =) Keep up the fantastic work! 5/5

    `Taleee. xx.

  • 17 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    @...wow...im speechless..u have this perfect rhythm in ur poems that makes them that much better:):)...keep on writting:):)...@

  • Its Weird That I've Had The Chance To View This Poem At a Time Where It Really Relates To Me...You Already Had Me At 5.0 When I Read This "You fall in my tear.
    You're part of my substance
    Of what makes me," I Knew It Would Only Get Better, And I'm Always Right...Keep It Up...I'm a Fan
    xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    I thought this was beautifully worded. Particularly liked these lines

    I love you, I miss you
    But you are still here
    Cause whenever I'm lonely
    You fall in my tear.

    This had a lovely flow almost like a tear lol. Sweet and enjoyable piece.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    So sweet...........and very romantic poem! i felt the sweetness w/ this poem its great! 5/5