I Miss you...

by deadnalone   Oct 24, 2005


I'm not sure where to start,
I don't know how to begin,
I guess I'll start with i miss you,
Cause that's what I'm feeling within,

I miss you like a cloud with no sun in the sky,
It has nothing to look up to and so it cries,
Crying raindrops fall onto the ground,
To just fade to nothing, nowhere to be found,

I miss you like a tree with no leave,
Nothing to move and drift in the breeze,
Leave scattered and sodden,
Walked upon, a broke soul down trodden,

I miss you like a mouth with no tongue,
It cannot speak, all these words left unsung,
They just hang in the moment, caught up in the mind,
Words left unspoken and all left behind,

I miss you like friends all alone,
Each missing each other, calling them on the phone,
It's like no ones answering your endless calls,
Pleas echoing along deserted halls,

I miss you like a lover torn away,
From the one she cares for and thinks of each day,
When she reaches for his hand, and when she reaches for his kiss,
And theres nothing there, only memories of this,

I miss you as a lover,
I miss you as a friend,
I miss your words,
Of how we wouldn't end,

I miss you as a tree,
And i miss you as a cloud,
I miss you with every tears i cry,
Each tear shows I'm not proud,

I miss you as i fall apart,
And i reach out for you touch,
And then i remember you're not there,
God i miss you babe, so much.

*all comments and votes are greatly appreciated as always.*

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  • 11 years ago

    by CJ Quintanilla

    This poem is awesome. i have nothing negative to say. i love the simile's and metaphors.

  • 13 years ago

    by confusion

    Youre writings got een better hun. so original

    They just hang in the moment, caught up in the mind,
    Words left unspoken and all left behind,

    i love these lines, and its finished perectly.

    5/5, no question -x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x-

  • 13 years ago

    by Toni

    Another brilliant poem! I had to read it a few times cos of the rhythm being irregular, but i actually dont think you should change that because it really helps to portray your emotions, especially the last three stanzas which are shorter. Its brilliant El xxx *hugs tightly*

  • 13 years ago

    by Hidden Meaning

    That is an excellent poem, i love the images you used to describe how you feel, i particularly like this stanza:

    I miss you like a mouth with no tongue,
    It cannot speak, all these words left unsung,
    They just hang in the moment, caught up in the mind,
    Words left unspoken and all left behind,

    It was really sad, but really really good, well done, take care,

    *~Jen~*

  • 13 years ago

    by Lemma

    Omg this poem is awesome. It's sooo sad *hugsies*. Love the first stanza.
    Emmi xx