What if I said I love you?
Would you really say it back?
What if I said I need you?
Would your red heart turn to black?

i love this verse it makes so much sense great work xox rc

I really do think that this poem was beautifully written. im glad i got to read it, it was a pleasure to read good poetry.

Though this poem have lots of repeats like the quesions and answers formation, it was a pure joy to read.

I wish I can complain about it more, but I can't.

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

Aww good for you im happy your happy....this is a great poem everything was perfect im really excited to read the next one.

If I said I'd never leave you,
Would you get up and go?
If I said our love's a river,
Would you let it flow?

that was my favorite line...wow this is a great poem 5/5

Really liked dis hun gr8 poem xxxx

This was really sweet and heartfelt. You expressed a sense of happiness and love. I enjoyed it. The only thing I would change is this line, "Would your red heart turn to black?..."
It made me feel like the poem was going to end in a sad way somehow, yet it was happy all the way through. I don't know, it just doesn't seem to fit. But anywho, I liked this one. Good job. And thank you so much on the commets on my poem. I really appreciated it. You're AWESOME too, Anthony:) lol=)

2 things, first off i dont think you need "red" in line 4 of stanza 1 "would your heart turn black" rolls off the tongue easier.

Second the last line doesnt work. it seems forced, like you knew tide would rhyme and you just put the first thing you could think of. I think you can do better with the last line. and end the whole beautiful thing with a memorable line that makes people want to come back and read it again.

Overall its a beautiful piece. i loved the way you use the same 2 verses in a repeating fasion. i did something like that in a poem called "love conflicting" other then minor things i loved it, its well worth me adding you to my fav list.

Wow that was awesome...so sweet and i loved the repitition of it..
great work :)
xoxox

Aww this si sooo cute. your like turned it around n it still made sence good one!!

Wow excellent use of words! this was an all around fabulous poem. gr8 work! i am adding u 2 my favorites!
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ASTOUNDING!!!!
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