This was good but there was some grammar mistakes, they kind of distract from the poem. The overall poem I though was good though.

Again, i will say "work on your flow" and again i will say "you cannot just end the line whenever you feel like it!" it is actually quite sad.. because these poems feelings and thoughts are pretty good, but they are being ruined by a bad flow..

and cares about you
^ should be "care"

nice job though, but i am serious about trying to fix the flow.. 3/5