Thru Shut Eyes

by keep n touch   Nov 1, 2005


Looking up at the world around
Robin's egg blue turns to dull gray
The sky, once flourishing with imagination
Now seems like a dagger to my eyes' dismay

Those fluffy, pure clouds
Floating aimlessly overhead
Once looked weightless and free
Now they're crushing me instead

That yellow-orange glare
Use to envelop me like clothes
Keeping warm my whole body
But now my blood has froze

Cooling me from the day
Was the refreshing wind
But now that silky breeze
Burns across my skin

Flowers, tranquil and beautiful
Released a soothing perfume
But instantly, the petals wither
Never again will they bloom

Destiny has called my name
Its voice dark and bold
People gather, surrounding me
Even still, I feel so cold

The world once seemed so perfect
Never did it reveal its guise
Death approaches all that lives
For this is the world thru shut eyes

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  • 17 years ago

    by Deana

    Its hard to imagine what your feelings would be if you really had to face death. you did a great job with this.

  • 18 years ago

    by Heather

    Great poem I liked it alot

  • 18 years ago

    by Falling Up

    Wow.. this is so metaphorical... it has so much meaning... before i read the ending, i was under the impression u were reffering to life and love and how u feel about it now, and the before, but really its an over all representation of life itself.. it totally consumed my thoughts and really got me thinking.. its a shame you only have 3 poems, which i said i would only rate 3, but i wish u had more, so i could read more of them.... you are a great writer and i love how u can express somthing by saying somthing else... great use of language in this!

  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    Wow girl!! this is some very deep stuff.. gr8 job!! i mean, i lyk ur rhythm, very well-chosen words... i reli lyk the way u compared wat the world looked lyk b4, and wat it looks lyk now.. pessimistic and sad, but nonetheless amazing!!!
    keep up the gud work
    thnx 4 ur comment, it meant a lot
    take care
    Nannoush

  • 18 years ago

    by aaron c s

    That was beautiful imagery and sensory writing. a great poem. well done.

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