Comments : Please Hold Me Tight

  • 18 years ago

    by HighPerfection

    I like it ive felt that pain before 5/5 definatly

  • 18 years ago

    by Carmen

    Thats so amazing. loved it. simple, but sweet

  • 18 years ago

    by xEmmax

    Wow, great poem, ur feelings are expressed so well, i can really relate! thanku so much for ur comment, it really means a lot. take care,
    emma xxxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by aaron c s

    That was a sweet poem. i loved the way u made the fist line of every stanza the same. it made that line like it was the most important and i guess it was.

  • 18 years ago

    by Little Dot

    Great poem. It was expressed really well. Keep up the great work. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by ShhhhItsASecret©

    I really liked this poem! Great job, my favorite stanza was:

    "Please hold me tight,
    Tell me you love me,
    And, tell me I'll be alright. "

    Great job, keep it up :D

    ~BJ~

  • 18 years ago

    by Mark Coates

    Don't ask questions,
    Just do what's right.

    nice thats so kl, i like that line wow nice poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Dreams

    Hi Michelle. I like the way you're trying to repeat the first line and varies the other lines. Also, I see that you do great in rhyming. These lines are pretty straigh forward in expressing your feelings, which I like it a lot. It's short and it's simple to understand.

    There's this line I find that you can make it better for I think it kind of disturb the flow a little.

    'And, cannot see the light.'

    But still, maybe it's just me. If that is so, ignore me. =)

    I'll look forward to further works of yours. Thanks for sharing. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    I will hold u tight if I can be there 4 u...lol...as a friend...and very nice..ur poems r nice...well...really nice...

  • 18 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    I will hold u tight if I can be there 4 u...lol...as a friend...and very nice..ur poems r nice...well...really nice...

  • 18 years ago

    by Natasha

    It's nice! your work is defenatly improving with time..
    I think that you have some serious talent going on here, and I enjoy reading.
    The first few lines weren't as amazing as the rest, yet very good.. so keep writing

  • 18 years ago

    by Vegetable

    Overall- very good, honest, and expressive. Maybe if you worked on the ryme a bit, because its predictable and a little forced-sounding. But I like how you conveyed alot of emotion without sounding fake.

  • 18 years ago

    by girly†

    Aww how cute

  • Very sweet, i think everyone would like someone like that...
    Well done, it flowed well and was very cute.
    5/5

    xxx cici xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by lostlllsoul

    Wow awesome poem.. it shows the insecurities of life really well.. great job.. k keep writting!

  • I love this poem...exactly what i feel right now...keep up the great work...u deserve a 5/5 and thats what i gave you...

  • 18 years ago

    by oldthings

    Short but sweet, great poem, i hope you have someone there to do that for you when you need them. 5/5 from me.

  • 18 years ago

    by xX-jess-Xx

    Aw thts nice, i really liked the 3 lines to a stanza format, it ws gd. great poem! jesx

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    Nice poem, I like the rhymes. Good job.

  • 18 years ago

    by Live, Laugh, Love

    Wow. That was really deep. but it was really good. I loved it.