Wow this poem left me speechless..i have to say that this is an amazing poem and i feel the esact same way...somehow i feel that u r still stuck in ur past...she dumped u...and everybody around u is tellin u to forget it and to move on with ur life when u truly cant...even thoe u tried u just can't ...i know how u feel...i'm in that position...and i have to say that u r one of the most wonderful GUY writers out there...keep up the great work...if u ever need me ...i'm here 4 u...
It has a great start. I definitely like the first stanza. The last line in the second stanza if it was my poem id have a different line and not the same that was in the last but thats just me. Maybe cut a few lines shorter in the last few stanzas, but otherwise its got alot of potential and you have a very unique style.
Wow this poem is amazing, god i think there should be millions more guys who can write poetry as well as you can, lol thats all i want ina man haha, btu no really though this poem is truly beautiful it is so captivating even though its not long like it held you in, once i got to the end i almost asked out loud for there to be more because it was just so good
I see that you already have some praise from people, and I'm gonna tell you this - that is all for a reason. This poem is great, I've read some of your poems a while back and fell in love with them all, and I've just done it all over again. There's nothing I wouuld change about this and nothing could make it better than it is. Beautiful job David. I wish you strength and love, and all the best.