Comments : Fighting temptation

  • 18 years ago

    by Daniel Hendrix

    I like your styll

  • 18 years ago

    by Little Dot

    Super work, this poem had good flow and rhyme through the whole thing.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    You are a VERY good writer! How long have you been writing poetry? I wonder I wonder. . .*

    Great job!

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    I think this could have used some more, but for what you have i think it's great 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Simple but effective, its very good.

    well done

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by xDryTearsx

    It was short but it was very powerful i think you did so good♥

  • 18 years ago

    by Dreams

    You had reality written in these lines. Though short you had the truths right there. However though, I'd love to see more lines added to make the poem louder and more powerful, I think this has potential for something more. Still, maybe it's just me. =)

    These are strong words used and it helps to make the mood evaporated from these lines much more weighted. I like your works. Thanks for sharing.

  • 18 years ago

    by Juls

    All ur poems are short but you get the emotion and the meaning out really well I like this one!
    Juls