Stuck

by ~Fallen Angel~   Dec 12, 2005


Haunting of my past and future
destroying what is left of sanity.
The sweet sorrow of death
comforting me as I sleep
And as I wake
Brings a smile to my face
As I consider the possibility
Considering the possibilities
of my life
Ending the strife
And if dreams come true
I'm dieing tonight
How I want to fight
But I got knocked out
And losing my mind
You see I stood up
Only to realize
That I was paralyzed

[PLZ RATE AND TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK AND I'LL DO THE SAME]

Copyright ©2005 Georgina M

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  • 17 years ago

    by Kara !

    "As I consider the possibility
    Considering the possibilities"

    I think you must have meant to do that, but it does sound a little much..

    Other than that though, I like it. These four lines:

    "Haunting of my past and future
    destroying what is left of sanity.
    The sweet sorrow of death
    comforting me as I sleep"

    What a great way to open up the poem. I knew I was going to enjoy reading the rest just from those lines - and I wasn't disappointed.

    And I had to reread, to get past the words, to what you was actually saying in this piece.
    A great poem. x

  • 17 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    You have so much talent! I love this poem! The flow and way you worded everything is perfect--The only error I found is:

    ''I'm dieing tonight''
    It is spelled ''dying''

    Small error---Overall amazing write! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow, i like this. great job u have serious talent 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jonathan

    I really liked the poem.. it was very good...

  • 18 years ago

    by ~*~Morgan~*~

    Speechless and understood completely