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by JJ Dec 17, 2005
Sadness, depression /
her pretty face
of the pain
that lies concealed
behind this image
her perfect smile
is merely an illusion
a portrait of the mind
shadows in a stranger's eye(and suggestions are always appreciated)
by shobhana kumar
There's a very different symmetry to your poetry. one that makes me come back, read them again!
good luck and keep writing
by Steven Beesley
I'm sorry that I can't really critique on a write that I already find flawless and perfect in flow. Well done!
I'm not a big fan of Sad poetry, but this one was very well written.
Heyy I'm dory. I love your poems. God family friends sports and poentry are my life too. I like all your hobbies also. Great job. im only 13...and my poems pretty much stink. But please check em out :-)
by HOLLY ARMER
I like the intriguing way you wrote this. It's a very deep piece that leaves alot to perception.
I also admire the ending, very wise! Keep it up~Holly