Hey good poem

Wonderful job, this poem has a good rhyme scheme throughtout.

Wow I really like this. good job

The first two lines were my favorite, but the whole poem was amazing as well, everything meant something and it was all really well written i loved this it was great 5/5

Your first stanza's is your strongest and best and grabs the readers attention.

I would break the last stanz'a apart into two seperate stanza's to help with the flow some. But that is only my opinion.

Merry Christmas babe

--Sher

Great poem. it really captures the reader at tehe begining and mantains their attention thoughout.

5/5

Wow... strong poem and strong words used in this poem. it had a deep meaning to it in my opinion.. your a great writer =) keep it up..!

--emotionless19

Great poem! I really like the second stanza. Keep it up!

Tiffany.xox.

Hey thanx for the comment....i really like this poem....good work...
keep it up
:)
. . . UnWaNtEd. . .

Hey i really enjoyed reading this one. it was really great to read and showed us what you were thinking and very well explained! Strong poem and very talented you are! :)

Your first stanza is strong and it drew the reader right into the state where they want more, but I can't say your second stanza is as strong as the rest for I feel that the transition is kind of abrupt to me. Still, maybe it's just me. =)

I like the meaning behind these lines, something many can relate to. Great set of words used. Thanks, it's a worthy read.

Other great poem..it drew me into reading it very well done my friend. Keep up the great work

Juls