Natural Form

by lisa marie   Dec 22, 2005


A dancing soft naked body
with painted brown eyes
underneath cool blue skies
rare laughter
deep dreams
long dark shining hair,
wraps around her pleasures
when will she be free
to waste her words
when will she live
in tranquil
this is her will
to be who she is
this is her time
to relapse into wilderness
she lives the sunshine
to be the shrine
of solitude
and clarity

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  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Enjoyed the imagery a lot and the movement of this piece.. The little rhymes you threw in seemed a bit feeble, and I think you'd benefit from not worrying too much about rhyming.. put more emphasis on flow and content.. But overall that's a very minor nitpick...

    one crit: in line 11, since it's an adverb, it should be "in tranquility".. good read, definitely.. pZ out

  • 18 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Beautiful imagery! The mood in this is so calm and serene, very nice! Keep it up~Holly

  • 18 years ago

    by Mona

    Wow. Beautiful. Breathe taking. Haven't read anything like this. I loved it. It's excellent. Keep writin =) lotsaa love -xxx-

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The poem has a natural flow leading to an inspiratinal theme... I love it

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