You're right! It definately sends out a good message, one that I'm sure everyone needs to hear. Great job as always David! I can't say it's your best work, as I really do love some of your other stuff; however it is still extremely well done as usual. Keep it up! (P.S. Sorry I never have any constructive criticism, I know that's what these comments are for, but to put it simply : I like your poems the way they are, and wouldn't change them if they were my own. :) )

Intresting. I really like the first stanza it send out a powerful messege so crystal clear. The second and third stanza's are good as well, but there is something amiss in the last stanze. I just cannot seem to put my finger on it.

Sorry, I know that I am not much help...
Overall pretty good..

--Sher

This is an amazing poem. I really enjoyed it. I smiled so wide reading this. When you mention God I was happy. If only people knew the power of prayer. It could save their lives. It can make it a lot better. Reason I loved this, is because I went through that situation, and judging by your 'inspiration' I am thinking you went through a similar one? Well, anyways a very nice write. Amazing stuff!

Good job! propz!!!

BX Girl

I love this poem. it was purfect, it had great rhythem, and u kept to the rhyme scheem. It also had excellent format! thats great!

I also loved this poem because it gives me hope...:)

Hmmmm. ITs harder then that though. Most who wish to die normally not only lost trust in themselfs, but also god. SO prayer is the last thing most will turn to.

Considering ive been there. you would think it was easy? no it wasnt. leave your ranting at home. or at least give me constructive critisism. i dont need that..

~David

Hm..that was really good. I liked that piece a lot. It had emotion and flow, good work!

-Jennifer.

Overall Rating: 4/5

I LOVE THE CHANGE. It adds more and completes the poem. Awesome job!

--Sher

I LOVE THE CHANGE. It adds more and completes the poem. Awesome job!

--Sher

Amazing poem, as always. keep up the awesome work. anyways, happy holidays!! take care,
-xXx-

Really expressive, you didn't use many words, but the message is strong... i feel a little better.. but just a little bit x.x... still depressed but it makes me wonder... if i could put feelings into such inspiring words my boy friend probably wouldnt have tried to suicide and i wouldn't feel so lonely and heartbroken this christmas x.x

I really liked this piece, it was inspirational and motivating... Keep writing you have great potential. Your message was very clear and your rhymes don't seem forced at all. Good job!

God Bless,
~BJ~

Great poem. its well witten and flows very well. the message is powerful and clear too.

well done

Wow.. great words that you chose, it made the poem more interesting and have more meaning, and the message was very easy to see, great job, 5/5

I really liked that, very well written. Keep it up, you have a great talent ;)
Take care xx

I really love this poem. i got shivers when i read it. keep up the good work! its really amazing!

Thanks for the comment..
Long it is, but it had to be lol

I like the message of this poem....but sumtimes u just feel no1 is there at all....still 5/5 tho....gr8 work

~*Who Cares?*~

Omg! your poems are sooooooo AWESOME! i love your style and just the flow of your poems, i'm looking forwrad to more of your work!

Take Care!
**Lolli**