I'm a bit taken back by this one... It's very powerful, very deep and very sad! Great writing!!

That was hot you got true talent but it was sad as hell

I'm shocked, oh my gosh, this gave me the creeps, chills.... I don't know how to explain it. this is some wicked, twisted stuff.... I'd hate to think that this is real...

This is such a sad story...
im truly sorry honey...
you made me cry...i promise im not lying this is the first poem in which i actually cried....and ive read MANY...

its very sad...maybe because its so honest...and i love it...its so heartfelt...
i cant tell you how much my head aches now...thinking about all those things...so sorry u had to endure them....
but i hope it all ends now...
please be happy...and leave your parents if they do this to you...especially your dad...hes a disgrace to men.
heres to wishing you that you may find hope and love in this new year.
happy new year.
dhaval.

Awesome poem.. very tragic meaning and ending to it but still, its really good! good plot and it makes me just want to read on! goodie work! one of the best! X)

Tragic babes but beautifully written as per usual. Extremely honest and heartfelt intent though Im glad its not based on truth...love you Risa

Oh ME Oh My Chels ...
Such a heart wrenching poem I must say ....
But you know these things really do happen to real people everyday and I think it will really open some people's eyes to the extreme torture and pain that some people enjure in a life time .....
I am completely blown away by your writing in this piece Chels .....it was so extremely heartfelt .....
Beautiful job on the writing ....
Luv ya A.I.D

Oh God this hit me real deep...you got talent girl. Like the others I am so happy this aint true...I was feeling so sad and angry at the same time. And the sad part like some said b4 is that this b happening all da time...its a very sad situation. But you did great with this piece. So emotional and the truth lies in your words.Maybe not from ur experiences but I am so glad u can express yourself so well. Keep it up,

Luv......

::MELI::

Chelsey
Luannes so right....this does happen within our society just to much....alot of twisted and screwed up people that really need to suffer for the pain and heartache that they put upon so many young people in this world....I wish I could get my hands on 'em....touching and so sad and truly situations like these break my heart.....
Love ya, Ann~

That was some great stuff! I've read a lot of things but that is a powerful poem! GREAT JOB!!!

Wow. Thanks, I needed a good cry! You've got lots of talent. I hope all thats not true...

Jaklynn

Wow...nice but sad poem.......

I'm completely lost for words - that was the best, most shocking, heart felt poem I think I've ever read. I'm shocked. I don't think a "well done" quite covers how good this poem was. Brilliant. ^_^

Is this a true story? I am so sorry babe x

I find myself at a loss for words which so rarely happens, the emotions that this poem brought out in me are almost overpowering. I had to read this 3 times just to get through it without crying, great job
Tim

As i'm sure you see its soo hard to differentiate where reality ends and a great poet takes over .. you made this seem so true its shocking . great job .. i only have one poem up so far but your criticism is greatly appreciatted

much love and grattitude
~ *Kate

Omg dat cut mi real deep...it waz so e,motonal..i could cry lyk thers no 2moz...omg u realy nailed it...keep witing coz u r da best ive seen...

Hannah 5/5

It was a great poem but wot happened to her after that?
did she kill herself at midnight or do her parents find her before?

So powerful and so well written. you have amazing tallent, i've read a couple of your poems, and just by reading them, i can tell that your tallent can go very far. clearly amazing write, and i hope you keep up the good work. It sent chills through me, and put a tear in my eye. goodjob 5/5 most definatly. keep up the good work darlin, i'd love to read more!

heidi may

Hey Chels :/
this poem is really touching yet kinda sick i mean cause of what happens to the girl and why :(

Love your work keep it up :)