Comments : When the clock strikes midnight

  • 11 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    I'm a bit taken back by this one... It's very powerful, very deep and very sad! Great writing!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Lo Lo

    That was hot you got true talent but it was sad as hell

  • 11 years ago

    by JJ

    I'm shocked, oh my gosh, this gave me the creeps, chills.... I don't know how to explain it. this is some wicked, twisted stuff.... I'd hate to think that this is real...

  • 11 years ago

    by swill

    This is such a sad story...
    im truly sorry honey...
    you made me cry...i promise im not lying this is the first poem in which i actually cried....and ive read MANY...

    its very sad...maybe because its so honest...and i love it...its so heartfelt...
    i cant tell you how much my head aches now...thinking about all those things...so sorry u had to endure them....
    but i hope it all ends now...
    please be happy...and leave your parents if they do this to you...especially your dad...hes a disgrace to men.
    heres to wishing you that you may find hope and love in this new year.
    happy new year.
    dhaval.

  • 11 years ago

    by Shadowlover

    Awesome poem.. very tragic meaning and ending to it but still, its really good! good plot and it makes me just want to read on! goodie work! one of the best! X)

  • 11 years ago

    by Eibutsina

    Tragic babes but beautifully written as per usual. Extremely honest and heartfelt intent though Im glad its not based on truth...love you Risa

  • 11 years ago

    by Lu

    Oh ME Oh My Chels ...
    Such a heart wrenching poem I must say ....
    But you know these things really do happen to real people everyday and I think it will really open some people's eyes to the extreme torture and pain that some people enjure in a life time .....
    I am completely blown away by your writing in this piece Chels .....it was so extremely heartfelt .....
    Beautiful job on the writing ....
    Luv ya A.I.D

  • 11 years ago

    by Rican Chemistry

    Oh God this hit me real deep...you got talent girl. Like the others I am so happy this aint true...I was feeling so sad and angry at the same time. And the sad part like some said b4 is that this b happening all da time...its a very sad situation. But you did great with this piece. So emotional and the truth lies in your words.Maybe not from ur experiences but I am so glad u can express yourself so well. Keep it up,

    Luv......

    ::MELI::

  • 11 years ago

    by Ann Stareyes

    Chelsey
    Luannes so right....this does happen within our society just to much....alot of twisted and screwed up people that really need to suffer for the pain and heartache that they put upon so many young people in this world....I wish I could get my hands on 'em....touching and so sad and truly situations like these break my heart.....
    Love ya, Ann~

  • 11 years ago

    by Broken_in_2

    That was some great stuff! I've read a lot of things but that is a powerful poem! GREAT JOB!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Jaklynn

    Wow. Thanks, I needed a good cry! You've got lots of talent. I hope all thats not true...

    Jaklynn

  • 11 years ago

    by xia thao

    Wow...nice but sad poem.......

  • 11 years ago

    by Ed

    I'm completely lost for words - that was the best, most shocking, heart felt poem I think I've ever read. I'm shocked. I don't think a "well done" quite covers how good this poem was. Brilliant. ^_^

  • 11 years ago

    by Lauren

    Is this a true story? I am so sorry babe x

  • 11 years ago

    by Tim Fleckney

    I find myself at a loss for words which so rarely happens, the emotions that this poem brought out in me are almost overpowering. I had to read this 3 times just to get through it without crying, great job
    Tim

  • 11 years ago

    by Kate

    As i'm sure you see its soo hard to differentiate where reality ends and a great poet takes over .. you made this seem so true its shocking . great job .. i only have one poem up so far but your criticism is greatly appreciatted

    much love and grattitude
    ~ *Kate

  • 11 years ago

    by perfectlyBROKEN

    Omg dat cut mi real deep...it waz so e,motonal..i could cry lyk thers no 2moz...omg u realy nailed it...keep witing coz u r da best ive seen...

    Hannah 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by alex

    It was a great poem but wot happened to her after that?
    did she kill herself at midnight or do her parents find her before?

  • 11 years ago

    by Heidi

    So powerful and so well written. you have amazing tallent, i've read a couple of your poems, and just by reading them, i can tell that your tallent can go very far. clearly amazing write, and i hope you keep up the good work. It sent chills through me, and put a tear in my eye. goodjob 5/5 most definatly. keep up the good work darlin, i'd love to read more!

    heidi may

  • 11 years ago

    by KenzieLee

    Hey Chels :/
    this poem is really touching yet kinda sick i mean cause of what happens to the girl and why :(

    Love your work keep it up :)