Awesome poem I love it and this line

It bothered me inside
In my heart I knew I was sad
LOve it 5/5!!

Wow sweetie that is so sad.. If it's true I hope you keep you head up. Great job

Wow, Instantly I could tell you were writing this poem strait from your heart. It was really well written, you accomplished what every writer wants, to take the reader into their feeling and thoughts. Very well done!

Aww..I have tears in my eyes. thats amazing, it just shows how you want a father and their true emotions about him. Great work I love it hun

Juls

Very strong emotions and word choice. Great flow too~~~

*who says poems can't have short lines? *wink*

Hey shoping buddy! great poem. you definately got the emotions out to the reader (being me!) this poem is so sad and heart breaking, but don't blame yourself for never being there it's not your fault! hopefully someone in your life can make up for the loss love of your father.

~Jacklyn

I'm so sorry for your loss, but this isn't your fault. Remember that. Keep your head up! Excellent poem!

Thank you for sharing this piece. It worked well and the words formed a clear message.

Keep writing
Nici

Oh Wow, That Was Sad. Amazing Job Though--I Could Feel Your Pain In How Your Father Was Absent From Your Life...And Very Clever Title.

The Only Criticism: The Flow Was A Bit Halted, But That Was Fine, As The Poem's Content Was Outstanding. I Was Blown Away By Your Emotion In This--I Think I Felt A Little Bit Of Your Pain.

Anyways, Fantastic Job, And Well Deserving Of A Full Point Score.

Matt

Smile?

I liked the quick pace of this piece and the fact that it flowed from one line to the next really well.

keep writing
Nici

I loved this poem it showed everything i was looking for in the contest, plus i totally can relate to it. Sometimes things can be so hard to deal with. One of your best poems. Thanks for entering my contest and i definitly will be keeping track of you in the future.

Another great work. :) *5/5*

Wow. that was great. a beautifly worded and just great. keep up the good work.
Emma 5/5

Ahh, this has touched a deep part of me that I didn't know existed.

Other then the formation of the poem, I have nothing to complain of.

"Was I not good enough
To make you stay
Am I the reason
You walked away"

"I went through life
Acting as if I didn`t care
That you, my father
Were never there"

These two were my favourite stanzas.

~Atomic

Favorite poem now. good job. i know what your going through with this poem. keep it up

Vrrrrrrry deep love it PLEASEEEEE read as many of my poem as you can...thnxs i will read as many of yours as i can, later..ok? thnxs keep it up.

LISSA

Hey im always here if u wish 2 talk! im the exact same as u i dnt kno my dad, he left me wen i was only 2yrs old!! hw can some1 do tat 2 some1 so little!? plz send me an email or summit love! spk l8r! XxXxX

Oh hunni, it's really not your fault. Your Dad was being a jerk for leaving and obviously needs to grow up. You deserve a father in your life, and you deserve one that will love and care about you. It is really a tragedy to see how many children grow up with a single parent because they deserve two. You deserve two parents, but you don't need two to be happy hunni. You are a strong preson who can be a whole you without your father who was a coward for leaving you. Hugs love, a very expressive poem.

-Tainted Mikochan

Tough poem to write..but you wrote it vrry well. awesome! keep it up.

LISSA

Tough poem to write..but you wrote it vrry well. awesome! keep it up.

LISSA