Comments : My journey

  • 11 years ago

    by JamesP

    Great job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Josh

    I love it!!!! Its so beautifully written it almost brought a tear to my cheek. I have one question though.... Who where you trying to portray with the little girl in your poem exactly?

  • 11 years ago

    by Samantha

    Wow this was so amazing! you did such a wonderful job telling this story and its flowed so well! nice job! you have definetlyleft me impressed and you have earned yourself a place on my favorites list! keep it up!

    sammie

  • 11 years ago

    by Sarah Drew

    This poem was truely amazing. It's one of the best I've seen on this site. It was so well written and had so much thought put into it. It was so beautifully done. And it has such an amaing story in it..

  • 11 years ago

    by Mona

    Wow. I'm impressed. I love the story it tells. Beautiful written. Loved every part of it! The end was perfect by the way. Made even more powerful. I'm impressed actually. Very well done! Lotsaa love -xxx-

  • 11 years ago

    by Loulou

    LET ME TELL YOUthis is is the most wonderful poem!!! when you entered my contest and i read this out of all the others this one touched my heart
    so be proud ok because this is an excellent poem!!

    love always tabby

    p.s congrats on 1st place

  • 11 years ago

    by master of shadow

    This poem is brilliant, the flow is great and the content amazing.

    however, the rhyming on lines 3-6 does not appear to fit with the rest of the peice....unless i have miss-read it (which is perectly possible)

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by *Unbreakable Soul*

    More than excellent poem...
    keep up writing
    5/5
    Amira :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Anne Conner

    That was very heart warming. ~anne~

  • 11 years ago

    by The Angel of Secrets

    :O I am stunned, this is amazing! How caring! If everyone was like that, how would the world be? Ill tell you; AMAZING!

  • 11 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    What a great poem...this just shows ur true soul and the way u love life and the kind of pure heart that u have. u r an amazing person for sure and u r so much talented too.
    right in my fav list u go with this poem

    May God Bless U Dear
    take care and all the best

  • 11 years ago

    by unstated affinity

    Wow.. marjan.. this is great.. i love it the most between ur other poems..the rithym just flow 5/5 for sure.. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Tristan

    Hey Marjan...
    It is Tristan
    OMG i miss hearing from you...I really love the new stuff...I want to say congradulations on your new writing you are so much better then I remember and I couldn't be more proud. I Love You So Much!

  • 11 years ago

    by Keilah

    That was so good! Its actully took me on a journey! i saw the little boy with just a shirt, the woman with no shoes, and the little gurl who wanted to see the world! the way you put it all together is so amazing! you are a great poet! keep up the good work!

  • 11 years ago

    by azlan26

    Brilliant - the poem maps out like a journey =]

  • 11 years ago

    by Laura

    Powerful words Marjan this was wonderfully written. This poem makes us take a look at what we have and made me realize how grateful i am for everything in my life...even if at times i tend to over look the basic needs of food, love, and freedom. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Darien

    Your life poems are really deep. They have a lot of meaning in them. People should read these and learn from their messages. You are a good poet.

  • 11 years ago

    by Michelle

    Wow! its very beautiful. nice poem Marjan not just poem but, very very...im impress
    keep on writing ha:)
    so, my final rate is........excellent!

  • 11 years ago

    by Michelle

    Wow! its very awesome. nice poem Marjan not just poem but very..very..im impress!!!
    keep on writng ha:)
    this poem was reminds me that we are grateful that we are in this world and to be contented of what we have...
    so my final rate is...............fabulous!

  • 11 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Hey Marjan, this is to congratulate you for winning the spot, u deserve every bit of it.

    all the best and take care