Plz wright comments i wanna know what everyone thinks?

I like it, read some of mine if you have a chance.

Hey.. thanx for readin my poem.. hm.. lets see.. i gave this a 5 because i think its a great BEGINING... i think you need to add more onto it.. make it seem like a story that makes people wonder.. and then... bring on some really good stuff.. i liked it a lot.. keep it up!! ^_^

athene

This is really good. i loved it. 5/5

Nice poem, keep it up.