Comments : Torturous, Blackened Hearts

  • 18 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Excellent poem. i truly loved it. keep up the good work.
    **lisa**

  • 18 years ago

    by xDryTearsx

    Wow this is like one of my favortitest poems i read on here. :)
    I loved it.

  • 18 years ago

    by Cari

    Very well written... keep it up!!
    cari

  • 18 years ago

    by Nici

    Again the descriptive language in this piece is well used and adds to the overall effect.

    Keep writing
    Nici

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Very effectivly written, you use of vocab and descriptions are very good.

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Void

    Hey, that was a really good poem. My favourite line is:
    Silver gates of a spiders weave
    I thought it was very creative, not to mention the great imagery I got from it. There isn't much I would say to change, as I like it as is, but I thought I'd point out some spelling errors:
    In this line:
    Torturous, blackened hearts they ' possess';

  • 18 years ago

    by malachy36

    Very nice