Comments : My reflection

  • 18 years ago

    by Bleeding_Red_Fallen_Angel

    You have a harsh thought about yourself...I love the mirror idea. Very cool. The poem all around was awesome. Nice work.
    xoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    I really enjoyed reading this.
    It had a certain chill to it.
    I loved your choice of words very dark and great indeed!

    Well done on this, you kept a steady flow trough out and really made me enjoy reading it xD

  • 18 years ago

    by *Vendetta*

    Theirs should be there's

    'And now the truth is unfurled' Though it does rhyme with world this is an awkward line

    'Silent screaming, scratching at the glass' should be silently or screams, one or the other, because though it does make sense I had to reread it a few times to be sure of that, which isn't good

    'And keep truth hidden afar' the afar is awkward, to flow better you could use 'so far' instead of 'afar' (so it still rhymes)

    Nice twist at the end.

    'At night she will come out to play' Doesn't give the image you seem to be going for; is a little too happy

    Nice Job, this is a well written poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Wow, words can't describe how powerful i think that is! 5/5.
    **lisa**

  • 18 years ago

    by Shawn

    You are a fantastic writer...really powerful

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by xDryTearsx

    This is a great poem.
    But so sad. =S

  • 18 years ago

    by Nici

    'Almond eyes'
    This first description drew me in as it is an unusual use of colur. The flow worked well throughout.

    Almond eyes

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Great peice, very well written. i like the idea of useing mirrors/reflections they are usually very effective and this poem is no exception.

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by .

    Your poems are too good..and that was about chris

  • Hey, very well written, i liked this a lot.
    I liked the way you used your words to create different emotions and ideas.
    5/5

    Thnaks for your comment, i really appreciate it.

    xxx cici xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Woah........ i mean, like,...... woah....

    i love it..... it's ...so...... perfect!!!! ripper stuff here!!
    rock on, Suzie