A Bullet Laced in Hate

by Darien   Jan 12, 2006


A Bullet Laced in Hate

I saw your name engraved in lead,
as your bullet hit my heart.
Visions of you rushed to my head,
my life now falling apart.

I remember we had so much fun,
on our very first date.
Love came in the form of a gun,
the trigger was your hate.

Even though you caused me pain,
I will still forgive you.
Your memory of my blood stain,
will soon seep through.

As my life flashes before my eyes,
slowly I start to fall.
You were always feeding me lies,
I believed them all.

The last image I saw was you,
it made me realize.
All this time I was being true,
you created my demise.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Diabolic Atrocity

    I really like this poem, but I think what I like most is the title, it's so catchy and just screams 'read me'. I like the way you said her love was a gun and her hate was the trigger, I don't know why, but that's just amazing to me, great job. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Goth

    Keep this up and you'll be my fav....5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    I really liked this one. it flowed great and the imagery was very good.
    the only thing i can really say about it is this line seems to short-
    I believed them all.
    i think you should add something.
    maybe 'To think I believed them all.
    Or maybe osmthing else. but to me it does seem to shoort of a line.

    Good Job. =]

    x3 Lauren

  • 17 years ago

    by xxmichaelxx

    Great job! i loved it! it's sosad and very emotional but awesome!!!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Sorry it took so long.. Thanksgiving week and all.. This poem is as great as the others.. I loved it, you have great rhyming skills and an awesome imagination I love this stanza the best:
    I remember we had so much fun,
    on our very first date.
    Love came in the form of a gun,
    the trigger was your hate.

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