WOW! So deep, sad and chilling. Wonderful write. A joy to read!

Very well done my friend.....I love it!

Darien,
That was a really sad poem, yet so powerful! I love it my friend...always take care... many friendly hugs for you.

*P.S:I'm in school, hope I won't get in trouble this time*

Nicely written, love the whole idea of this poem! Simply perfect! Great job!

Je l'aime! It was very nice ^_^ I love reading your work, you're a great poet.

Awesome job, I know how you're feeling in this poem. You have amazing imagery in this poem. Wonderful work as usual.

Hey darien. g0od p0ems. i like the w0rds used

AWSUMNESS, MAN!! GREAT POEM!!

Wow Darien i know this one. i have been through the same with my ex boy. but its still really awesome, keep up the awesome poems.

Love is like that! I like your unique perspective, or more so your ability to convey it!
Flawless imager, flow, and word play!
Take care and keep it up~Holly

Heartwrenching.....

As my life flashes before my eyes,
slowly I start to fall.
You were always feeding me lies,
I believed them all.

That was really good, humm but i think maybe an "and" would sound good before the "I" in the last line...I think it makes it flow a better than it already does..>Great great job!!! Dang you have a lot of comments on your stuff...how do you do it lol?

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Always4You

I loved the ending! The flow was choppy in the begining but smoothed out nicly as the poem picked up speed! You really know how to write a chilling poem!

Wicked! I loved the rhythm of this poem it was like iambic pentamiter but a bit kind of stilted it suited the style of poem well. Having said this imho i felt that in stanza three it was a bit too stilted perhaps remove a sylable or something? Great work!
Aaron (remo)

I felt the emotions in the poem! Amazing job, I really liked it... *5*

**meggie**

"Your memory of my blood stain,
will soon seep through."
The rhythm of these two lines disrupts the rhythm from the prior stanza and the prior two lines. Well the first line is okay, but the second is too short, syllable-wise
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"it made me realize."
"you created my demise."
I think it sounds better rhythmically if the second line read "you caused my demise", just because it removes one syllable, which makes the rhymed lines have the same number of syllables -- good for a strong, rhythmic ending.
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I really enjoyed the metaphor. In a way, it made me think of a very angry, modern day cupid... with a gun.

I really liked this poem. nice flow, nicw words. although, i couldnt figure out if it was literal or metaphorical...but thats my fault i guess 5/5

I really loved you work, i added you to my favorites! keep up the greta writes!

That was an amazing poem. I loved the emotion you put into it. It was well written, flowed perfectly, great choice of words, and a good rhyming scheme.
I didn't feel like the rhyming was forced so it worked.
Great job.
You are an amazing poet.
5/5
Breanna