Ooooh i love this poem awesome!!!!!!

First of i want to begin with saying this is a well written free prose. if your fiace is not poetic I suggest you ricite it to him as the flow is complex
Musings of You
by Silver

The moon appeared whole that night
At rest, deep within your eyes
Unsure am I of the heavens now

'Though musings of you stay

Our lips became acquainted once
Fervor was in abundance
The season's phase is unrecalled

'Though musings of you stay

Honeybee tended to timid rose
I, in your snug embrace
Winter winds almost forgotten

'Though musings of you stay

Joyous faces on a frozen lake
Turn sour with penciled lines
Nor are you, my love, faultless

'Though musings of you stay

beautiful poem,please recheck spelling with fervor and make sure they are penciled in.

Well I really didn't understand what it meant until I read the bottom. Sorry I'm a blond LOL but you did do a really great job and I really don't think you need to change a thing about it. Give it to him. And congradulations hun!!!

Wow, impressive. I'm sure he will love it, it's a beautiful poem. :)

I think that refrain gets a little over the top and ruins the effect of the poem.. I liked each stanza a lot.. in the second stanza, third line, 'is' could probably be removed; you dont seem to stick to a strict syllable count and as I read it, it'd help the flow.. other than that I liked this.. later

I really like this, it has a natural flow and rythmn,it has some really great images, and the way you worded it is quite unique and adds to the flow, as does the repeating title line, really gives it more emphasis, more impact,, but mainly it is just a beautiful poem of love-one can't help but feel the emotion filling their heart as they read this.Very, very touching.Great job!

Wow... Very well written and you can really feel the message you were trying to get across. Very nice

Hey love! Wow, your fiance is one luck child to have such an elequent and passionate lover. Repetition is a difficult tactic to use well, and I must apludaud you for doing so. A well thought out brillant write and an enjoying piece to read. Your author notes also added to the understanding of this poem because I was able to see you reason for writing. I always liked when authors discuss the poem the wrote. Beautifully done hunni.

-Tainted Mikochan

Amazing poem

First of all, thanks a lot for your tips about my poem "The Lonely Model". I really appreciated, and your advice is taken.
Well done for this poem, i really like the way you write, very creative.

I love how the poem represents thats cute. and the point of the poem is lovely. "things are forgotten but our love does not fade away" amazing poem 5.5

This is definetly different. but i like it. the repeating line holds a lot of power and i just love the first stanza. your poem does exactly what you set out to do with it. :)

Wow this is very different but it was also very well penned, not just another cliche love poem. I wish I could write like this, with such beautiful sophisticated words and style. Keep up your lovely work, and thanks for your comment!

Sarah

This is a very good poem.. its kind of unique but I really enjoyed reading it. It's so beautiful and I absolutely loved the first stanza. You did such a wonderful job on this!