Just Another Funeral

by Samantha   Jan 16, 2006


Roses set up around the casket
A chill arises in the air
Memories flow like giant tears
Happy times that were never there

A pale face laid to rest
Angelic sweet and beautiful
A hard life that was lived
So distraught and sorrowful

Daddy's little princess
No one really ever knew
They thought she was happy
Instead of seeing the pain she was going through

A knife was taken to the wrist
Over and over again
Eyes that could darken up the light
Couldn't stand the pain

No more tears left to cry
On this hellish day
Where this young pretty girl
Would be put in the ground to lay...

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  • 18 years ago

    by Rusted x Heart

    This was really well written. The rhyme was also well thought out. i just think some parts kinda slowed down the flow due to excess of syllables. But I really liked the entire depiction. Its so cinematographic to me really. ANd I love the way this is the alternate view, not the typical 'Im cutting my wrists cause Im sad' poem, but one about the aftermath without being cliché. Again, very nicely done.

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Brilliant job. realy wellwritten

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by xDryTearsx

    This was a really good one. :)
    Great job.
    ----
    And your welcome for the advice im here to help (Or try at least) lol
    If you wanna talk just message me im always here for you. xD
    kk well yea
    Love Always
    --NErdyPants

  • 18 years ago

    by Megadrive

    That was very beautiful, in of course a dark sort of way! I can only give slight advice... and of course that is to use some commas and periods, because it gives your poem a rhythm and tells the reader when the sentence is over. And I think u meant *Thought* not *Though* lol missed the T. And as for a name... I have no idea!=(

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This poem is so sad, it made me cry. aww
    and i am sorry but i cant think of any titles for this one at moment, will get back to you soon
    tara xxx

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