Comments : If Only...

  • 11 years ago

    by Samantha

    Very nice job... your poem is well written and well expresses your views... keep it up

    sammie

  • 11 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I've read a couple of your poems, although this is the only one I will comment on. I see a painful, heartbreaking theme in your works, and I think it's good you can find some peace in writing. I'm going through a tough time regarding matters of the heart right now too, so I can somewhat relate.
    I really liked this poem, the simplicity works well. At some point everyone has said "if only," it's a common phrase. I really felt the emotion in this write, just like your others. Well done, keep writing. I think on your road of healing you've found a talent.

  • 11 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Very good peice, the words "if only" are used a lot so are very easy for people to relate to. this peice is very welll written and contains a lot of truth.

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Gretchen

    If only your poem would go on longer lol I really liked it : ) Good job

  • 11 years ago

    by ♥Leah♥

    Whoa. i could never have put this point into words like u just did. wonderful, wonderful writing skills. makes me realize alot, ya know. 5/5.

  • 11 years ago

    by Robert

    Theres truth in this poem, and thats what i like in it. well done.

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Thats awesome! 5/5 =] It's all so true!
    Great job!!

    - natz x-x

  • 11 years ago

    by J Lau

    James, thanks for spotting the error.

    J. Lau

  • 11 years ago

    by LuvMeAlwayz

    Awesome poem!

  • 11 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Oh so very true this Poem is. I loved it. I am sure alot can relate to it. keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sole

    Awesome poem, once again - hooked the reader - and it's so true, what is love without it's temporary mishaps?

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 11 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Very nicely written! great work!

  • 11 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Simple: But it works for you in this poem. The emotions are real and you can feel it coming through the words and getting to the reader. The words are addicting and help the reader continue. Though love poems tend to be cliche, this one focused more on recognizing than losing love.
    I suggest maybe taking the it out of some of the sentences, it really doesn't seem needed.

  • 11 years ago

    by Bridgette

    I really like the way that you ended it. it gave it a nice effect. The repetiton of If Only love really held up well, much better than most repetition poems. This was great!

  • 11 years ago

    by Synh

    Very nice. Attention grabbing, good flow and rhythme. I adored this poem of yours and really enjoyed reading it. People often say 'If only'. I hear and say it all the time.

  • 11 years ago

    by Synh

    Very nice. Attention grabbing, good flow and rhythme. I adored this poem of yours and really enjoyed reading it. People often say 'If only'. I hear and say it all the time.

  • 11 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    Soo many people can relate to this poem .. it was really just a beautiful poem

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 11 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    Wow...I like the contrast and irony in the lines. It leaves you thinking about the power of love. Superb!

    [lost_laureate]

  • 11 years ago

    by Cayce

    Soo true!! I loved the was this one was written. It was very simple, but that makes the poem more enjoyable to read. The flow was good as usual. Great job!

    Cayce x

  • 11 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    This ALSO was different, in a way, but is was rather good. It is well written and has a good meaning to it. Awesome job. You are a good writer. Keep it up. 5/5

    >black&&blue